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He always told me I was deep.
An unfiltered distillation of a humanitarian ocean.

He accepted me, gills and all -
  He knew that I needed my eccentricities to breathe
         under the seascrapers of pollution
               that hung over my head.
 Or he said he did.

At the end of it all,
he tugged the gills open to expose me;
    my innards trailed across the coral reef
       as I swam trustingly forward, hoping for the best.
 I tried to believe.

I believed him, gills and all -
But eventually, he left me, with holes in my sides
   Where he had spooned out my intestines
      To tether them to a boulder.
 I tried to breathe.

He always told me I was deep.
It must have been a surprise to read:


                                  Death by puddle.
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It's the little things.

Full credit to =Deathbypuddle whos name inspired me to write today.


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:icondomsaverem:
I love "He knew that I needed my eccentricities to breathe/under the seascrapers of pollution..." Utterly fantastic work Kathryn! :D
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`KathrynODriscoll May 16, 2013  Student Writer
:D Aw! thank you so much! :D
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:iconhumanscolopendra:
I love the metaphores in it.
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:iconvog112:
Hi, Kate, I like this poem and others of you. Be yourself, dear. I' m also eccentric, so I know what is feeling.
Hugs
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`KathrynODriscoll Mar 7, 2013  Student Writer
Smiles, thank you :tighthug:!
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:iconkuraitenshiv:
its good and im always glad to see you write
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~Story-of-a-Mind Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the unfiltered distillation. I adore I needed my eccentricities to breathe and the idea of leaving holes in the sides where those eccentricities had been when leaving. The whole concept of dying of shallowness fascinates me.
But I can't help it, I just feel your title is to weak. It does not do your powerful poem justice yet.
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`KathrynODriscoll Feb 11, 2013  Student Writer
I think thats because the title is to explain the concept. To explain to the person its about that the little thing broke me way more than the original issues.

Shrugs. Its personal. I dunno. I dont want to look at it right now let alone edit it lol
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