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Makeshift by the lake,
I watched you finish my sentence
- Hastily retracting the bitterness
and editing out
     my overstated meaning.

A fly serenaded you,
As you derooted the root,
- Deflowered the bud
and edited out
    every semblance of a meaning.

I allowed it, in the summer haze.
For you to slather me
- In someone elses
typewriter ribbons
     soaked in someone elses feeling.

But when you slept at last
I arose, painted bleach by your tongue
- Shook off your petty rules
and crossing outs
    and ran away, free - and feeling.
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This poem was written for all those who write unusually. Free verse, a new form, an old unused form. Those who experiment, who lament, who descent into madness... for those who smile as people advise them how to become technically correct, because they know that one day they'll be chasing us

Write yourself. Be honest about who that is, and then write it. If you are honest and express who you are, someone else will relate to it.. no matter how its written.


Oh and I alluded to an e.e. cummings poem;

(here is the root of the root and the bud of the bud
and the sky of the sky of a tree called life;which grows
higher than soul can hope or mind can hide)
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Good stuff!
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`KathrynODriscoll Feb 8, 2013  Student Writer
Hey thank you!
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*BeyondJen Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh gosh, I adore this, both for the meaning and your diction. :heart:
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`KathrynODriscoll Jan 14, 2013  Student Writer
Blush! Thank you so much Jen! :D I'm doubly glad I watched you now! :giggle:
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*BeyondJen Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart::hug:
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~Story-of-a-Mind Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
True, true, sometimes the feelings we need to pour into the awaiting form of a poem are just to strong for boundaries like grammar and punctuation.
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`KathrynODriscoll Jan 8, 2013  Student Writer
Nods! Chase me, watch me as I blaze! :D
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~Zevais Jan 5, 2013  Hobbyist
Splash in the water,
I threw the stone
-slow expanding ripples
giving life
...to this blank slate

something flew too close
it shot from underneath...
-Grabbed by the fangs
giving death
...to this blank slate

The breeze picked up.
Felt it on my face
-Numbed me
staring out
...with my blank sensation

Am I ever awake?
Is there color in my skin.
-Looked into the reflection
...the blank stare.
The ripples the only thing making me look there.
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`KathrynODriscoll Jan 9, 2013  Student Writer
I never know how to respond to your Twistings, but I love them so!
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~Zevais Jan 9, 2013  Hobbyist
You don't have to say much. I fine with people acknowledging they have seen it. They are my weird mental things anyhow.
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